Day 4 of TTD read-through

[wayfaringwordhack]

I wasn't feeling well enough to have B&N over, but lying in the bed with the laptop went down all right. So, TTD has been read from cover-to-cover by moi. Thirty two pages were snipped in all, but there are several chapters, notably at the beginning and ending, where I didn't allow myself to edit. I'll have to go back and tend to those. But not tomorrow (going out in the boat). And probably not this weekend (World Rugby Cup starts, and I must pack!), and definitely not in the coming two weeks while I'm on holiday. I guess that means things will have more time to stew in the old mushy gray matter.

I also read the crits from frigg, navicat, and kmkibble75. Thanks so much, gals and guy.  Your comments were a big help. frigg, I'm definitely still talking to you, you silly nut. 

Comments

[footlingagain.livejournal.com]

Bless! I hope you're feeling much better now.

I'm toying with the idea of (i.e. trying to talk myself out of) getting a laptop, too. The prospect of being able to sit in bed with a computer on my lap is much too tempting.

[mnfaure.livejournal.com]

Yeah, just that womanly thing. I didn't feel like being on my feet to clean or entertain, so I thought it best for all to postpone. :P

As to laptops, they are very handy. :D However, I bought mine used and I'm always having problems with it. I don't know how much is the machine and how much is the climate.

[footlingagain.livejournal.com]

I've often wondered how your computer copes with the climate there.

It's been damp(!) here this summer, but we're assured it's just a blip. I'm still wavering on the 'Do I really need a laptop? No, but I really want one...' issue.

[mnfaure.livejournal.com]

The climate is hell on electronics and batteries. Even with all the problems I have with it, I doubt I'll replace the laptop while I'm here.

As for needing/wanting, that's always a tricky issue. ;-) Good luck with the decision making.

[frigg.livejournal.com]

*in nutty relief*

[mnfaure.livejournal.com]

It scares me to think that you might have been serious when you said that. o.O

[frigg.livejournal.com]

well, half serious. I expected my harassment of chapter 1 and my "What did you do to Valsidere???!" comments might get you out of the chair. :)

[mnfaure.livejournal.com]

Re chap 1: No, I've known for a long time that I didn't have a good handle on c1 for new readers. But being too close to it, I was really hoping said readers would give me some ideas.

Re Valsidire: I appreciate your comments because it let me see that I didn't quite achieve what I was going for, ie making it evident that her sanity and ability to cope was slipping like Isaferre's without a) making her a carbon copy of Isaferre, and b) making her "over-the-top" evil. I also wanted to contrast her against Bria's personality (and how Bria is able to speak her mind more), but all the ending chapters (from 49 to 60) are first draft, so it's normal that I didn't pull all the strings correctly. I'd appreciate discussing any further thoughts you have on it. I'd like to get Val right. :)

[kmkibble75.livejournal.com]

You're very welcome! I hope it helped a bit. :-)

[mnfaure.livejournal.com]

It definitely did. I appreciate so much hearing what worked, as well as what could use some help.